It was a sunny afternoon when Benny and June
were wandering on the street, hand in hand. ‘Why don’t we get married?’ said
Benny. ‘Why?’ June was surprised. ‘Em. Because I am holding your hand, you
see?’ They had been dating for three years. And Benny thought their
relationship was mature enough for a marriage.
It wasn’t long before their departure for
their travel wedding. They chose travel wedding because they hadn’t got enough
money for a wedding feast or a honey-mood. June was in her curtain-made wedding
dress. However, she felt on top of the world in their worn-out tiny car. They
were singing, screaming and laughing as loud as they could until Benny found
out the scorched smell in their car.
They got off to check out the problem and
found the burned-out engine. Benny started to repair it when June stepped
forward to see what was in front of them. Suddenly, June couldn’t help herself
to laugh out. ‘How crazy I am!’ she said to herself. ‘At least I’ve got this
crazy man with me.’ she smiled.
This is an interesting story, but perhaps different from what a cause-and-effect essay should be like? There should be a clear cause(s) and effect(s). I can see that the effect is the "burned-out engine" but perhaps try to elaborate on what caused the burned out engine/their current situation? :)
回复删除I chose the same picture as you and it's interesting to see you write a totally different story from me. I can see that you want to write the cause and effect of the picture in a different way, but just as Yunsi mentioned, you did not tell us clearly what caused the burned out engine and what effect will there be.
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